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You opened your eyes and didn't know where you were. You started walking around and then found a huge place. You jumped up to open the door since you were small and grabbed onto the doorknob and opened the door. There were a bunch of of doors all around you. As you looked from left to right there was a loud noise behind you. The noise was shocking to you and got to your curiosity so you decided to go and look to see what that noise was. You walked and the noises were getting louder and louder! You finally got up to the door that was making all the loud noises. You opened up the door slowly to only get a glimpse of the things in the room when all of a sudden, something yelled really loudly on top of everything else saying, "EVERYONE SHUT UP!!" There were a couple of people that were fighting that quickly stopped and questioned, "Germany?!"

You squeaked a little at the voices. Lucky for you, no one heard. Or so you thought. The man named Germany was talking to everyone and one man walked up to you with the biggest smile on his face. He picked you up and raised his hand after Germany said, "Raise your hand and make sure that it doesn't do anything to mock my past." Once he saw the man's hand he said, "Germany recognizes his friend Italy!"

"Germany look! I found a cute little bella~! Can I keep her please?~ I promise to wash her, and feed her, and clean up after her, and..." Italy went on until this one man came up and yelled at Italy saying, "BLOODY WANKER!! She is a new country! You can't just go and treat her like a bloody dog!" The man holding you started panicking and hid behind Germany.

"W-Well..I-I thought that I could have a sister for once! Well France is kinda of a girl but she is a real girl!" There was another man that came up and grabbed you out of Italy's hand. "Yo! I bet you that when she is older she is super hot, what do you think Britain?!" You blushes at this and got grabbed again by the man named Britain.

"Do any of you gits know how to handle new countries?! You need to be gentle with them. Especially new girl countries!" He looked down at you and smiled softly making you smile back and giggle. "What is your name little one?" You looked up and said, "I'm Deila. Well that is my countries name. My real name is ______." He smiled at you again but you got taken away from a man with long blonde hair. It was curly and he said, "Ohononon~ Well how about I be your big brother and you be _____ Bonnefoy?~ How does that sound my little mademoiselle?~" He had on a perverted smile but it still had some care in it and the mixture made you giggle more.

Soon before you knew it, all the people were fighting for you. Some were fighting so for others like this one girl with long brown hair with a frying pan. You jumped out of the one man's arms and started shaking scared until that one man that mad you blush said, "DUDES!! I KNOW HOW WE SHOULD DECIDE!!! We should give her things and whichever gift she likes best, that is her big brother!"

"OR BIG SISTER!!" A few girls yelled at him. Everyone agreed to that and you did too. It was going to be fun with all the attention that you were getting (what kid DOESN'T want attention?) and you were really excited. You were so glad that so many people wanted to be your older sibling to care for you. Everyone introduced themselves to you so you knew who they were. There were so many gifts and all of them were really great!

Who did you choose to be your older sibling?

1. Austria
2. England
3. America
4. Germany
5. Italy/Romano
6. Japan
7. China
8. Hungary
9. Russia
10. Belarus
11. Canada
12. Prussia
13. Spain
14. France
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:iconcreampuff-sky:
Critique by Creampuff-sky Oct 15, 2013, 9:36:17 PM
It's pretty nice... but usually (in my option! No offense!!!) I more like it to be your own country rather than a random country so that the readers that has OCs could be more comfortable. thanks, that's all I gotta say BTW. Hope you won't get angry by this, I also would like to tell you that people could be also more comfortable with first name and last name for introducing yourself desu yo. (LOL) and so... I'd like to say you have an awesome sense of imagination, make france a bit sillier and so as the others like how I enjoy it. probably it'll effect :) Bye! that's all I could say now *puts up peace sign* Bye!!! Espeon-san!! :D
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I think the way you introduced the reader to the scene was done quite nicely, though not quite original, per say. You managed to keep the characters, well, in character, overall. Though the story is great so far, the beginning was a little off-putting - no offence meant, of course, I just think that maybe a little more description would be good there. I don't understand why people get ticked when the author chooses a country name for them - I know for a fact, some readers like me, have no imagination when it comes to that. I like how you tied up all the loose ends at the end, and I can't wait to see more. Kudos to you!
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pokemonmunna Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
5
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yandereobession Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2015
8
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SamanthaTorres12348 Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2015  New Deviant
I don't know but good story.
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:iconzebraqueen098:
zebraqueen098 Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2015  Hobbyist Artist
4 9and 10 :D
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:iconiamcrazymemegirl1234:
8,10, or 12. there all just so awesome 
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:iconthefiredragonesreshi:
TheFireDragonesReshi Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2015  Student Filmographer
Numba 5!!!!
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:iconlittleshing123:
littleshing123 Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2015
No. 1! Austria!!!!
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:iconclearisbae4lyfe:
Clearisbae4lyfe Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2015
10?•^•
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:icondarkmoon347:
darkmoon347 Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
5, 8, or 9 anyone of those is fine with me.
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:iconhetalovergirl:
hetalovergirl Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2015
Can't pick between 6,7, and 11
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:iconlovekitsunenaru:
lovekitsunenaru Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
cant pick between 5 or 8 XD eathers fine meow 
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:iconshowmelove435:
showmelove435 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2015
I don't know 😐
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:iconjulietteminusromeo:
JulietteMinusRomeo Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2014
This is really good, I love how you write!
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:iconespeon10:
espeon10 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2015  Student Writer
Thanks, I am glad that you like it. I am attempting to continue on with these writings.
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:iconpokemongirl260301:
PokemonGirl260301 Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I always hid in my closet and read a book when someone tried to pay attention to me xD
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:iconhetalialover10020:
Hetalialover10020 Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2014
i choose england becuse he has better exminxe idk i dont know how to spell
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:iconkairi732:
Kairi732 Featured By Owner Edited Oct 2, 2014  Student General Artist
I think you should have them all at a sleep over so reader can get to know them instead of fighting like they do in their meetings and they could have everyone as the readers oni-chan...

Consider it...

If this idea doesn't please you then I would like to vote for the Italy brothers to make things interesting...
Instead of how every other hetalia has chosen England house live in its extremely boring...
Plus I think the character should have a special ability like for example the ability to see and speak to ghosts or even be able to have wings or go to Neverland or something.
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:iconespeon10:
espeon10 Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2014  Student Writer
I might take up that idea or have something similar to it. (The second idea you said with the character having special abilities)
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:iconrainbowsplash2012:
RaInBoWSpLaSh2012 Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2014
Belarus fo da win!
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:iconlittleshing123:
littleshing123 Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2014
England, Russia, Belarus or France. Please.
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:iconxxhetalianatheartxx:
XxHetalianAtHeartxX Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2014
Spain, Germany, or Austria
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:iconcyndertenkaicourage:
CynderTenkaiCourage Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2014  Student Artist
CHINA OR JAPAN OR ENGLAND!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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:iconpolarbark:
polarbark Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2014
cANNNAADAA
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:iconlink-fangirl:
link-fangirl Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
Germany or Japan
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:iconcatsuno:
catsuno Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
the italy brothers
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:iconxxthesirenxx:
xXTheSirenXx Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2014
I second that!
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:iconilikecupcakez123:
ILikeCupcakez123 Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2014
Um... Um... Um... WAIT, WHAT DID AMERICA SAY?! :iconwtffaceplz:

Buuuut, on another note... THE ITALIAN BROS FOR THE WIN!!!! =DDDD ( No... not the plumbers... =_= )
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:iconsunstone123:
Sunstone123 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2014
Belarus for the win
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:iconsevrindarkthorn:
SevrinDarkthorn Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Canadaaaa<3~
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AKmoose18 Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2014
Germany please!!!!
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:iconladylyyn:
ladylyyn Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2014  Hobbyist Interface Designer
10
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:iconramenbaka11:
ramenbaka11 Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014
Russia! Or America!
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:iconxeointheleafeon:
xEoinTheLeafeon Featured By Owner Edited Aug 11, 2014  Hobbyist Filmographer
my real name is actually Delia, heh
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:iconfairytailandhetalian:
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iuliaangel Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014  Student Artist
Hungary, Japan or Germany. Ahhhhhhh can't decide! !!
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:iconclaraadrowned7789:
ClaraaDrowned7789 Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
I'd want my brother/sister either Japan or Hungary can't decide
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Otaku-Demigod1 Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
 I would choose Norway or Vietnam or Greece but none of them are on the list. So Prussia or Romano... Dayum.... Can't choose
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InvaderMiz644525 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2014   Artist
Germany and italy/Romano
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:iconfrostedcrazyswagbros:
face family and italy bros. XD I forced france englandto be related aswell as america romano!!!
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:iconespeon10:
espeon10 Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2014  Student Writer
Sorry but no face family, maybe some other time but not this time
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:iconmizlovestacos:
MIZlovestacos Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
CHINA OR CANADA, EITHER ONE!!!!
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:iconshewolfzoroark:
shewolfzoroark Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Italy/Romano
Spain
Japan
China
Hungary
Canada
:) 
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:iconlunamoonwolf00:
LunaMoonWolf00 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
China as Onii-san
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:iconkhlover-san:
khlover-san Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Canada or china or the Italy brothers
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:iconlululion432:
Lululion432 Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2014  Student Writer
I'd pick japan or canada
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:iconnikolai-nyobelarus:
Nikolai-NyoBelarus Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
((Canada, the guys needs someone to always remember him after all.Or Italy, all he has had are brothers so why give a sister? ))
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:iconrintehhetalian:
RintehHetalian Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2014
i chose belarus or hungary its tied between those two for me Dx
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:iconlevixjessica:
Levixjessica Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014  Student General Artist
Totally Belarus that will be so much fun to live with her
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