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You were a new country. Your country name is Ravinca. You were still small and needed a big brother or sister. As you walked around in a giant field, there were buildings near by. You ran up to one and it was HUGE! You couldn't reach the door nob and kept trying to jump up to it. You gave up on trying to jump and get it but you looked over and saw that there was a chair that you could have sit up on. You dragged the chair over to the door and hopped onto it. You opened up the door and hopped off the chair running inside. The place was so pretty and big that you could get lost very easily. You started to hear yelling by people and raced to the noise. You walked up to the door and you heard 2 men yelling at each other.

You pushed the door open slightly and saw that there was 5 men in the room. They were all older then you obviously. There was one man who was stuffing himself with hamburgers and sodas. One was building a town of some sort in the room. One was just sitting down in a chair smiling. The last 2 were the ones that brought you here. They were yelling at each other about something and then started calling each other names. Well, the one with the longer blonde hair kept saying 'Black sheep of Europe' while the other one actually called him names like 'wanker' and 'git'. You giggled at all the excitement in the room and everyone looked your way but you were too busy giggling to even notice them.

Everyone walked up to you and you started shaking with fear. The one calling the other guy a wanker bent down to your height. He held out his hand and said, "'Ello love. Are you lost?" You nodded and looked down. The man smiled up at you and held out his hand. "Well here. You must be a new country." You grabbed his hand and he picked you up into his arms.

The man that was eating went up next to you and said, "No way! We haven't had a new country appear in a long time! Come on Britain! Let me see her!" "You bloody wanker! You got to be gentle!" He glared at the man. The man with long blonde hair came up next to you and smiled handing you a red rose. "My my~ She is very young and she looks like me with her eyes! She much be my sister!" The man that was sitting down looked at you and said, "Da but look at her smile. It is just like mine da?" The man that is holding you said, "She has my hair! She is definitely mine..." He looked down a little upset and whispered loud enough for you to hear, "I never had a sister before." The one with the brown hair in ponytail picked you up from the first man and said, "She kinda sounds like me a little."

You jumped down and looked at all the men that was above you. They started to fight about who was your older brother since it was true, you did look like all of them in a way. They kept fighting until the man named Britain said, "Ok, fighting will get us nowhere!! Why not we let her decide? Like when me and France were fighting for America. Which reminds me, what is your name little one?" You hugged your puffy dress and blushed from shyness saying, "R-Ravinca. M-My country n-name i-is R-Ravinca." The one named France said, "Ravinca~ What a pretty name~" The man named America said, "DUDES! We should totally have a game with this!! We all go and hide and who ever she finds first gets to be her older brother!"

"That sounds fun!" You said with a cute smile that could melt anyone's heart. The rest agreed and told you to close your eyes which you did. They took you somewhere but all your heard was to count to 10 and to open one of the 5 doors once your done. You started to count and heard 5 doors slam shut when you were almost done. You yelled excited, "10!~ I'm coming big brother!~" You opened up your eyes to see that there was 5 doors painted a different color. One was Green, one Pink, One Brown, One Red, and the last Orange. Which do you choose?
Green Door
Pink Door
Brown Door
Red Door
Orange Door

Which door do you choose?

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:iconxxbunnyhearts-chanxx:
I like it a lot!It seems to have a lot of creativity whoch is really good.I also like how you managed to give England a good tone.Overall,I say it's great.Just lessen up the paragraph's a bit.Though,You can also tone down a little bit on the details.But.hey,Details make a good story right?So.That's basically it.Please dont hate me.I'm just being honest.Also,I love how you managed to perfect the Reader.And,It's adorable woth so much fluff!!!!Really,Trust Me,You are really good at this.As in,really good.But,You should have let us choose our country name...To be a bit more comfortable and easy for ourselves and to not make it hard.
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I love the story you make it so so........ many details, creative, and I could vision it my self and the everything is so good it so cute that they fight over little reader for them to be big brother for the reader. It so cute and I don't know to write or said because the story so good no amazing awesome everything in positive way
you can you want to make good story I said this is cute, adorable and the best
cute, again adorable and fluffy story I ever see in the DevianArt and I give you
five stars at evrything it so adorable and I love adorable, cute stories. GOOD JOB AND KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK GIRL!!!!
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:iconhollyhyena:
HollyHyena Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2015  New Deviant
Red :D
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:iconlouloume:
louloume Featured By Owner Edited Jun 25, 2015
red or brown 
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:iconlucyrukianami:
Lucyrukianami Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2015
Red
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:iconthefiredragonesreshi:
TheFireDragonesReshi Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2015  Student Filmographer
Pink~! Wait that might be France.......sh!t
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:iconflyingvanilla:
Flyingvanilla Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2015
Why cant i have all of them to be my brotherCry forever 
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:iconmizlovestacos:
MIZlovestacos Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Brown was America so....pink!
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:iconally-luvs-hetalia:
Stuck between red and pink...
PINK IT IS!
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:iconleafstar1012:
leafstar1012 Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I want to choose pink, however, the orange door is tempting me.
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:iconqueenfreak28:
queenfreak28 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2014
are there links to the next chapters? this is good!!
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:iconespeon10:
espeon10 Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2014  Student Writer
Not yet but I will get them eventually after I get all my voting done.
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:iconqueenfreak28:
queenfreak28 Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2014
eeeehh!! can't wait!!XD
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:iconmizlovestacos:
MIZlovestacos Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Brown! Here I come Canada! Maybe.....
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:iconlunamoonwolf00:
LunaMoonWolf00 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Orange, here I come big brother China!
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:iconshadowthecreepypasta:
ShadowTheCreepyPasta Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2014
RED
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:iconbrinleykirkland:
BrinleyKirkland Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Red!
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:iconcreativehelper14:
creativehelper14 Featured By Owner May 13, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
Red!XD
I love this by the way~
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:iconjazzcat67:
JazzCat67 Featured By Owner May 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Green please:-)
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:iconpipcat5499:
pipcat5499 Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I'll tell you this you should make a little story for each door so the reader can choose who ever. But if I had to choose
Brown I guess
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:iconxxculledcondiixx:
XxCulledCondiixX Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Student Filmographer
Orange door of course..
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:iconflyingvanilla:
Flyingvanilla Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2015
Ur icon fits ur comment
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:iconspainlover1010:
spainlover1010 Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Hobbyist Interface Designer
Red it's the color of awesomeness!!!!!!!!!!!
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:icontheravingidiot:
TheRavingIdiot Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
....All of them.
BOOM now I have five older brothers.
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:iconstormpirncess16:
stormpirncess16 Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014  Student Artist
Pink!
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:iconkawaiipandah123:
Kawaiipandah123 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Green
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:iconhetalialover101anime:
Hetalialover101anime Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Student Writer
Anyone I don't care but good story
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:iconrowdyruffgirlshade:
rowdyruffgirlshade Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Student
Red door
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:iconcommandercoconutmilk:
CommanderCocoNutmilk Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014
Orange, since it my fav color =D
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:iconsnowflower2097:
snowflower2097 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Red
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:iconkatcraft455:
katcraft455 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Plz!! I need them soon!!!
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:iconitalyhetalia896:
italyhetalia896 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Student General Artist
i choose the green door
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:iconawesomeprussia101:
Awesomeprussia101 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013
RAINBOW..... nah jks pink door..... just a quick question though.... is poland just going to randomly pop out of it?
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:iconespeon10:
espeon10 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013  Student Writer
No no no! Poland will not just randomly pop out.
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:iconask-jemi:
ask-Jemi Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
red door plz.
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:iconravendarkangel:
ravendarkangel Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013
Can you make the chooses for the story soon
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:iconespeon10:
espeon10 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013  Student Writer
I'm trying! Don't get me wrong, I have been working on them but I can't promise anything soon.
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:iconravendarkangel:
ravendarkangel Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013
Ok. Take your time, I just hope they can be done soon
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:icongardengnosticjade:
GardenGnosticJade Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013
Green
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:iconquuen:
quuen Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013
pink red or green
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:iconkitkatoleary:
Kitkatoleary Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Green
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:iconeat-sleep-hetalia:
Eat-sleep-HETALIA Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013
Pink
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:iconespeon10:
espeon10 Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013  Student Writer
Ok! I have enough votes now to pick the readers next big brother!!
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:iconepicbro14:
epicbro14 Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013
ALL LE DOORS. :3
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:iconespeon10:
espeon10 Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013  Student Writer
Lol alright. I'll accept that only this time.
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:iconcanada11118:
CANADA11118 Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Orange
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:iconhotshot432:
hotshot432 Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013
Pink and red doors
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:iconkonekokitty13:
Konekokitty13 Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013
Green
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:iconpandaday12:
pandaday12 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013
Brown door
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:iconawesomeprussia98:
AWESOMEprussia98 Featured By Owner May 3, 2013
RED
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:icondeb98:
DEB98 Featured By Owner May 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
DX so many colors! Ummmm.... The red door :D
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:iconfelicianavargas98:
FelicianaVargas98 Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Red door
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